Avalon:Volume 0 Chapter 12 - Revision history

Aorii at 17:31, 30 April 2013

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	"I apologize in advance for the accommodations in which the Marshal shall receive you in."		"I apologize in advance for the accommodations in which the Marshal shall receive you in."

	Linnaea's firm voice interrupted the chat over the communication ring as they passed yet another set of retracting blast doors and into a corridor of exposed gray ~~ceramacrete~~. The descent continued into what was obviously the fortified bunker of an old military base.		Linnaea's firm voice interrupted the chat over the communication ring as they passed yet another set of retracting blast doors and into a corridor of exposed gray ceramicrete. The descent continued into what was obviously the fortified bunker of an old military base.

	"Chateau de Falaise had lay abandoned since the Revolutionary War and was only reactivated months ago. The new command bunker we are in has yet to finish, but it is also the only secure and sufficiently private complex the 2nd District would lend us. We created some furnishings by nano-fabrication, but the Marshal forbid any further decoration given the, ''ardor'', in which Colonel Hans-Rudel took upon the task."		"Chateau de Falaise had lay abandoned since the Revolutionary War and was only reactivated months ago. The new command bunker we are in has yet to finish, but it is also the only secure and sufficiently private complex the 2nd District would lend us. We created some furnishings by nano-fabrication, but the Marshal forbid any further decoration given the, ''ardor'', in which Colonel Hans-Rudel took upon the task."
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	"That's fine~ It'll be just like camping out... underground."		"That's fine~ It'll be just like camping out... underground."

	Shirayuki replied just before a final set of reinforced gates began to open, revealing a strangely contrasting room. Its exposed ~~ceramacrete~~ walls and floors were bared like an unfurnished basement, but a richly decorated rug filled most of the room. The round table and chairs sitting on top, while simple in materials, were meticulously detailed. It was as though everything was made by a poor artist who lacked materials but invested creative aspiration in abundance.		Shirayuki replied just before a final set of reinforced gates began to open, revealing a strangely contrasting room. Its exposed ceramicrete walls and floors were bared like an unfurnished basement, but a richly decorated rug filled most of the room. The round table and chairs sitting on top, while simple in materials, were meticulously detailed. It was as though everything was made by a poor artist who lacked materials but invested creative aspiration in abundance.

	Only one person sat at the table, and Kannon immediately recognized the soft black curls, copper-brown skin, and crimson-red eyes as the image of Marshal Sidika. Despite being well into her thirties, which meant she was probably over a hundred years of actual age, Sidika Krivoshein had a firm, well-endowed figure that would easily pass for a model was she somewhat taller. Her deep eyes, soft nose, and fair lips formed a perfect mixture between Northern European and Middle-Eastern traits. The large red garnet that decorated her elegant hair bun accentuated her grace and beauty, as though a dark red rose in full bloom. A devilish smile which seemed to perpetuate as her natural expression only made her more enticing.		Only one person sat at the table, and Kannon immediately recognized the soft black curls, copper-brown skin, and crimson-red eyes as the image of Marshal Sidika. Despite being well into her thirties, which meant she was probably over a hundred years of actual age, Sidika Krivoshein had a firm, well-endowed figure that would easily pass for a model was she somewhat taller. Her deep eyes, soft nose, and fair lips formed a perfect mixture between Northern European and Middle-Eastern traits. The large red garnet that decorated her elegant hair bun accentuated her grace and beauty, as though a dark red rose in full bloom. A devilish smile which seemed to perpetuate as her natural expression only made her more enticing.

Aorii at 16:46, 30 April 2013

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	Kannon found Linnaea's attempt at Chinese to be fairly decent, despite her obvious German accent. But the knight nevertheless nodded apologetically to Aurora.		Kannon found Linnaea's attempt at Chinese to be fairly decent, despite her obvious German accent. But the knight nevertheless nodded apologetically to Aurora.

	Abbess (direct translation of Shitai) Han Rong was the leader of the ~~more canonical~~ Buddhist nuns within the ''Eclipse'', which made up roughly half of their personnel. Because most Chinese names were notoriously difficult to pronounce for people who grew up on English as the primary language, many simply called her Aurora. It was a literal translation of her courtesy name Jiguang, which was like a middle name that often substituted one's given name upon reaching adulthood.		Abbess (direct translation of Shitai) Han Rong was the leader of the Mahayana Buddhist nuns within the ''Eclipse'', which made up roughly half of their personnel. Because most Chinese names were notoriously difficult to pronounce for people who grew up on English as the primary language, many simply called her Aurora. It was a literal translation of her courtesy name Jiguang, which was like a middle name that often substituted one's given name upon reaching adulthood.

	Kannon thought the nickname was appropriate too. Aurora's cream-white hair flowed past her thin waist, which only added to her white robes, wispy figure, and pale, beautiful complexion -- she would almost look like a snow spirit had not for the red hakama skirt. Aurora was also the tallest there at one-seventy-eight (5'10"). Her expression always had a serene and pleasant smile on, but she never opened her eyes and rarely spoke unless asked.		Kannon thought the nickname was appropriate too. Aurora's cream-white hair flowed past her thin waist, which only added to her white robes, wispy figure, and pale, beautiful complexion -- she would almost look like a snow spirit had not for the red hakama skirt. Aurora was also the tallest there at one-seventy-eight (5'10"). Her expression always had a serene and pleasant smile on, but she never opened her eyes and rarely spoke unless asked.

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Aorii at 02:13, 8 April 2013

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Aorii at 21:37, 20 March 2013

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	"Merely trying to rectify reality. Forcing a mirror on them is... usually the best way."		"Merely trying to rectify reality. Forcing a mirror on them is... usually the best way."

			Few seconds of weakness was the limit of what Sidika allowed. Her tone immediately shifted back to her usual, one of absolute confidence, as though there was never any doubt:

			"Not to mention, did you know that the Imperium Project specifically modified its heirs to be 'incomplete' human beings? One of the things they lack is a personal sense of ambition, so they don't try to take over. But that also means they lack a drive to excel, unless pushed by duty or circumstance. I'm giving her that push, one towards a path that will ultimately benefit our goals."

			Kayeten wasn't sure how to take the first fact. It made perfectly good sense, and certainly beneficial to society. Yet... there was something ''inhumane'' about it. As for the second... well, he was already used to his mother's methods.

	"Just, please, don't crack her."		"Just, please, don't crack her."
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	"Well, if she's that fragile, then nothing of value was lost... But I think she'll manage. Her thinking was already impressive for someone without experience. Seriously, Eight Trigrams Formation? It's so obsolete it's almost new."		"Well, if she's that fragile, then nothing of value was lost... But I think she'll manage. Her thinking was already impressive for someone without experience. Seriously, Eight Trigrams Formation? It's so obsolete it's almost new."

	Kayeten sighed and shook his head, fingers reaching up to massage his temples.		Kayeten sighed and shook his head, fingers reaching up to massage his temples. He couldn't argue against Sidika's past results, but being used to her ways didn't imply ''liking'' them.

	"You're an evil, evil person mother."		"You're an evil, evil person mother."

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