Avalon:Volume 0 Chapter 11 - Revision history

Aorii at 04:29, 27 April 2013

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	Kannon almost rolled her eyes in disbelief.		Kannon almost rolled her eyes in disbelief.

	"So... don't tell me, is Eternal ~~suppose~~ to have foresight or something?"		"So... don't tell me, is Eternal supposed to have foresight or something?"

	"Foresight?" the redhead raised an eyebrow. "How is that ~~suppose~~ to be useful? Congratulations, you finally broke the time barrier -- which is taboo, by the way -- and discovered one of countless possible futures forged from infinite permutations of choices in the upcoming decisions; your knowledge is now more likely to spark the wrong assumption and lead to a fatal mistake... No. What you... Eternal has is far more powerful given any well-applied intellect: it's called Perfect Hindsight."		"Foresight?" the redhead raised an eyebrow. "How is that supposed to be useful? Congratulations, you finally broke the time barrier -- which is taboo, by the way -- and discovered one of countless possible futures forged from infinite permutations of choices in the upcoming decisions; your knowledge is now more likely to spark the wrong assumption and lead to a fatal mistake... No. What you... Eternal has is far more powerful given any well-applied intellect: it's called Perfect Hindsight."

	Seeing Kannon's frown, Shirayuki gave a knowing smile:		Seeing Kannon's frown, Shirayuki gave a knowing smile:

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	==Chapter 11 - Legacy of A Utopian Dream==		==Chapter 11 - Legacy of a Utopian Dream==

	I groaned as my eyes opened to yet another dark, unfamiliar room. But before I could focus my blurry vision, the irritation in my throat sent me into a coughing fit.		I groaned as my eyes opened to yet another dark, unfamiliar room. But before I could focus my blurry vision, the irritation in my throat sent me into a coughing fit.

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	Those words of Marshal Comorus were no mere threat, but a decree that threatened to close Arkadi's path.		Those words of Marshal Comorus were no mere threat, but a decree that threatened to close Arkadi's path.

	(~~Force~~ him to choose an alternative...)		A shiver went up my spine as I relived how blatantly, how ''stupidly'' I approached him later that same night.

			(The world is no fairy tale. Empathic words alone mean nothing. Belief must be applied alongside action and force --- forcing him to choose an alternative...)

	I didn't know how, but I felt like my instincts knew which direction I could find Shirayuki in. It was time I gave her a reply, or rather, a proposal of my own.		I didn't know how, but I felt like my instincts knew which direction I could find Shirayuki in. It was time I gave her a reply, or rather, a proposal of my own.

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	I could hear my voice shaking uncontrollably. I could feel my sweating hands covering up my ears, my rapid pulsing gasps that failed to pull in any air...		I could hear my voice shaking uncontrollably. I could feel my sweating hands covering up my ears, my rapid pulsing gasps that failed to pull in any air...

			Shirayuki's eyes suddenly widened in horrifying realization as she watched me hyperventilate.

	"That's... just not...!"		"That's... just not...!"

			She suddenly leaped back...

	"''Burst Aura Emanate, Tranquility!''"		"''Burst Aura Emanate, Tranquility!''"

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	==Chapter 11 - Legacy of An Utopian Dream==		==Chapter 11 - Legacy of A Utopian Dream==

	I groaned as my eyes opened to yet another dark, unfamiliar room. But before I could focus my blurry vision, the irritation in my throat sent me into a coughing fit.		I groaned as my eyes opened to yet another dark, unfamiliar room. But before I could focus my blurry vision, the irritation in my throat sent me into a coughing fit.

2012-12-20T15:53:44Z

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	"No! I-I'm not!"		"No! I-I'm not!"

	"---~~You could~~ access ~~any~~ information~~, present and~~ past~~, as long as you knew how~~ and ~~where~~..."		"---With perfect hindsight, you're able to access universal information past and present..."

	"That's impossible!"		"That's impossible!"